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Post by shadow on Sept 26, 2007 18:56:03 GMT -5
Chapter 6 A Friend like No Other..
Tiny emerald eyes stared admiringly up at handsome amber eyes. they connected, with a look of pure love. Opalkit blushed. " Hey Tidalpaw...." She mewed softly.
The massive white tom's eyes softened and his heart seemed to melt, he silently knelt beside his friend. Then licked her over the ears, " Hey Opalkit. How are you?" He purred softly and wrapped his tail around the little kit almost three times. Is this what it feels like? The feeling Cheetahpaw has for that apprentice in Shadowclan? If it is, my feelings for Opalkit are far stronger then Cheetahpaw's.... I don't know but I am definetly in love. And it's feels so amazing.. He purred at the littlekit, " Opalkit-" He began but was interrupted by the sickening glare of Ashfoot.
" Get away from here!" She hissed, " You overgrown bear!" She spat and barreled him over. Knocking the wind out of him. She glared defiantly at the loner she hated. Her kits would not spend time with loner filth like him and his sister. For an old cat she was tough.
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Tidalpaw limped back into camp. His sides heaved with pain. Open flesh was visible and blood poured freely from the wounds. He was losing to much blood. His head became dizzy and he collapsed on the floor. He saw Kestrelheart and Opalkit running toward him. Kestrelheart's eyes filled with annoyance, and Opalkit's filled with fear and grief. He felt the little kit thrust her nose into his fur. " O-Opalkit..." He whispered barely speaking in her ear. " I l-love you..." he shut his eyes to see Cheetahpaw weeping.
" Will he make it?" Cheetahpaw whimpered and glanced at her brother laying on his sideon the oversized nest she had made for him.
Kestrelheart stared sadly at her, " Don't know. That fox caused him to lose a lot of blood, that's not good." He said staring at the tom he despised sleeping so helplessly.
Opalkit stared sorrowfully at Tdialpaw. Tears streaked dwon her face. He wasn't ging to live, he was never meant to. She rememberedthe prophecy all to clearly,
The tide comes and goes, there is no one who holds the power to stop it, light shines down on the tide with an emerald glow. It casts it's glow on the rims of the tide, pure opal colored foam. Out of the foam will rise the Tide once more,for this time its love is pure.
Tidalpaw, her love, would be alive again. But he would come in a different form. Most likely a form that was her age. Tidalpaw had been crushing on her from the first day he met her. Suddeny his amber eyes blinked open. He gazed at Opalkit and his sister, " Don't worry, I won't leave you guys!" He coughed up some more blood, as it trickled down the corner of his mouth he added, " the only thing leaving here was that fox, and I took care of her.." He winced at a stinging pain in his side, it was infected, he wans't healing well..
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Post by Tigerfur on Sept 29, 2007 22:52:55 GMT -5
I LOVE this story so far! ;D I hope you update again soon so we can see what happens next! ;D Can you check out the story Gathering Darkness in the RiverClan section? PLEASE and THANK YOU! ;D
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Post by shadow on Sept 30, 2007 16:41:06 GMT -5
OMG! Tigerfur, Sunsetfur is a realllllllllllly good writer! Hehehe! i snuck to TSF and read grey skies and Black Dawn already! LOL.
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Post by Tigerfur on Oct 1, 2007 15:07:58 GMT -5
Hey, you cheathed! Lol, did you like it so far?  Actually I think its best if you pm me so you won't give away any spoilers. 
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Post by shadow on Oct 6, 2007 12:15:38 GMT -5
Chapter 7 A Lying Killer
After the death of Minnowtear, I knew just what to do. Heck that traitorous she-cat deserved to die anyway! Well, I am just going to tell Mistystar the tragic accident and how Mousetail was just so angry he tried to attack her. I tried to save her Mistystar but it was to late. Mousetail dragged her body and the kits off to who knows where! It was all so depressing Mistystar, I might just not make it without her!
Those were the lies that Ripplefur planned to sob to his leader. The devious tom didn't care for Minnowtear at all. He just needed to pretend like it was Mousetail who killed her not him. he stumbled into camp shakily with forced tears streaming coldly down his face. His hateful amber eyes glistened with frustration as well as some faux anguish. He moaned loudly to draw attention to himself, and staggered toward Mistystar's den. " Mistystar!" he cried with the faintest hint of amusement in his voice, " Oh Mistystar!" he groaned loudly. He glanced at all the eyes that were glued to him in despair. " Mistystar she's gone!" He cried once more and crumpled to the ground as his leader bolted toward him.
" Oh no!" She gasped, " Ripplefur, please, what has happened to Minnowtear? You must tell me!" She demanded, tears brimming in her eyes.
" Mistystar.. Minnowtear she is no more!" He wailed and pressed his face into the ground, pleased with himself for being so convincing. The sound of gasps and wails from Pebblefoot her brother sounded off.
Mistystar choked in grief," How?" Was all she could manage. The leader watched as pebblefoot hurried to his mother Mosspelt to comfort her.
" We all know her previous mate, Mousetail. Well she was telling him that she hated him, the devil just couldn't take it and he tried to attack her.. He got ahold of her neck, she was dead before I could even unsheathe my claws.." He whimpered, " OH! I just don't knowif I can make it without her!" He sobbed as his body racked with amusement.
Mistystar was furious at this, quickly without thinking she leapt onto high rock, " Tomorrow my clan, we will attackThunderclan! And we will make sure that Mousetail will die!" She jumped down and hurried into her den to cry herself to sleep.
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Meanwhile Pebblefoot had grown suspicious of Ripplefur's very convincing story. Just that morning, Minnowtear had defiantly preached her love that he still had for Mousetail, she had told him clearly that she was going to tell him she still did, and was expecting his kits. Pebblefoot stared curiously as Ripplefur gallantly stood up. The deputy could have sworn he saw a smile flash over Ripplefur's face. He had to find out if this was true. Swiftly he shot out of the camp toward Thunderclan territory. He slunk silently through the undergrowth, his pelt almost entirely blended in with the shadows. He reached the camp quickly, as he was faster then the average Windclan cat. He saw Mousetail licking three kits, while sobbing with grief.
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Post by .Swiftclaw. on Oct 6, 2007 12:25:41 GMT -5
I LOVE this so far!!! You are a very talented writer!!! ;D ;D ;D Can you check out the story The Darkness Rising in the Sagas section? Thanx!!! ;D
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Post by shadow on Oct 6, 2007 14:35:04 GMT -5
Aww, thanks Swiftclaw. I will! =)
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Post by shadow on Oct 6, 2007 18:13:05 GMT -5
OCC: Ya! This will be my very frirst time posting a chapter about SC!!! Ok just so you know there is an epidemic in shadowclan.
Chapter 8 Kittypet Problems.
Fantasypaw daintily jumped the strange wooded border. Her mentor, littlecloud demanded that she come here to get some catmint, for all the cats who had gotten blackcough. Catmint he had said, was the only cure if you mixed it with honey. She had smelled and seen some of the stuf before so knew what to look for but she didn't expect to see a kittypet staring at her with wide green eyes. Fantasypaw rolled her eyes and leaped into the two-leg garden. She felt strange being her. The kittypet smiled and flicked its tail as a greeting.
" Heya! How are you? I am Mimmy. This is my garden." she had such a soft voice that Fantasypaw hardly heard her. She turned her tortieshell head and smiled back.
" Hey Mimmy."She said and went back to foraging for the herb in the tightly packed garden. taking a step back to take a look at the garden she realized this might take awhile for the place was filled with plants. Which made this hard to single any of them out. hse turned to see Mimmy staring at her in a cheerful way. " I am Fantasypaw of Shadowclan" she stated. But the kittypet stared at her strangely.
" OOOOOOkie doke then. Fantasypaw of Shadowclan." The kittypet giggled and giddily went to lap up some warm white liquid.
Fantasypaw rolled her eyes but stared curiously at the bowl of liquid, " Uh, er.. Her Mimmy!" She called and trotted toward the she-cat. Coming closer she realized the she-cat was black and white but had a light pink thing tied around her neck fastened into some sort of bow. " What's this stuff?" Fantasypaw bent down to sniff the creamy stuff.
Mimmy thought this was funny, " Your joking right!?" She giggled, " Are you serious?" She purred, " You don't know what milk is?!" Mimmy giggled loudly now, " Mama always said Clanners were smarter then us, guess not thouhg!" she threw her head back and chuckled.
Fantasypaw bristled in fury. Of course she knew what milk was, and this wasn't it. Milk was the warm delicious drink that they fed on as kits. Not this stuff. " No it isn't!" She hissed and bent closer to the stuuf, ' Is it safe to try, Mimmy?" she mewed curiously.
Mimmy rolled her eyes, " Yes clanner, you saw me drinking it didn't ya?" She meowed in an annoyed voice.
Fantasypaw cautiously crouched closer and lapped some of it up quickly. Old memories of kithood flooded her mind. This stuff was milk, but not exactly the same, " Mimmy, do have a green leafy plant here that smells like mint?" she aked and eagerly lapped up some more. She kept on drinking it until the bowl was empty. Scowling she sat up. Mimmy nodded and padded toward a bush. Then the she-cat dissapeared for a few moments and came back carrying lots of the plant in her jaw. Fantasypaw gleefully took it, and raced back to the bush to gather more. While she was back there, she found several other herbs that her mentor was low on: Dock, Chervil, cobwebs, Poppyseeds, and Borage. Greedily she tugged on a huge leaf and placed as much of the stuff as she could carry in it. Then she wrapped up the leaf and stumbled out. Not one but two Kittypet's now sat there. Mimmy and some tall white she-cat, Mimmy was whispering something to theother kittypet. Suddenly the white cat beckoned, "Fry! Wendy! Ellie!". Three more cats appeared. A huge tabby, a bright red she-cat, and a furious looking golden tabby.
Mimmy gave Fantasypaw a cheeky grin and announced, "Fry, Wendy, Ellie, Jubilee." She mewed. Fantasypaw hissed as the big cats Ellie and Fry glared down at her, but Mimmy went on faster now, her voice growing louder in excitement, " This Clanner is trying to take our plants, oyu all know I don't like that..." The kittypet gave apouty face, " Now my siblings, Attack her. Scare her away from my garden."
Fantasypaw bared her fangs and scooped up her package. She scrambled to get up the fance. But she fell off the other side wth a thud. Before she could get up, Fry was on top of her. Being so close to him, the Medicine cat apprentice realized how devilish he was. She feared for her life. She despratley struggled but Ellie ad helped pin her down. She glanced over at the white cat who's eyes were blood red now, Fantasypaw screamed as the white cat crouched to leap.Everything seemed to have slowed down as the kittypet jumped. Fantasypaw watched as her best friend Toadfoot crashed into Jubilee. The she-cat let out a shrill cry of hope, " TOADFOOT!" She cried and found new strength, thrashing about with her paws she broke away from the pair. Fry, however did not approve o this. He turned as Toadfoot killed Jubilee. Fantasypaw shouted to try and save her friend but she was knocked out by Wendy before she could.
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Toadfoot gently helped Fantasypaw up. Her eyes slowly blinked open as he did. The young warrior smiled, " You okay?" He gave her a swift lick. His eyes were cheerful, but in his heart he felt sorrow. Sorrow that he would never be able to take Fantasypaw as a mate.. That was what he wanted most, to be with her always. Keeping his feelings for her bottled up was the hardest thing he ever had to do.
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Post by ghostfeather on Oct 7, 2007 2:38:27 GMT -5
dun, dun, DUN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! srry it adds to the dramatic effects ;D lol
can't wait for u to post more!
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Post by meadowstripe on Oct 7, 2007 16:45:06 GMT -5
It's great so far!  . I always loved SquirrelxShrew.
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Post by Tigerfur on Oct 8, 2007 17:49:41 GMT -5
EXCELLENT chapters! ;D Awww, I feel sorry for Toadfoot, him and Fantasypaw would proabaly make a really good couple.  Post again soon! ;D
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Post by shadow on Oct 10, 2007 16:40:41 GMT -5
Thanks To all of you for replying! ;D
Chapter 9 Me & You
Once Barley, and the others came... I felt safer. Out of all of them, it was Barley who cared for me the most. He was also the one I trusted most. After a long while of thinking it over, I finally realized I wanted Barley to act as a father to my kits. They had never seen Smoky, and truthfully they didn't know he was dead.. All I had told my boys was that, he was a big strong dark grey and white tom, almost exactly like Barley. The funny thing is, I am not sure if the others accept our relationship.
Floss, the widowed she-cat stirred. A horrid dream hed woken the she-cat up. She had dreamed that Coal and Smoke had died, and there was nothing she could do about it. The first thing the she-cat did was hurtle herself at the nest where her kits slept. Her eyes grew softer as she looked at the adorable kits sleeping peacefully. She slowly wrapped her body aound them and shut her eyes.
" They are very handsome young boys, aren't they?!" purred a soft voice she was always excited to hear, " Almost as beautiful as you, Floss.." The black and white tom blushed.
Floss's eyes shot open, Barley stood in front of her, His cheeks were rosy from embarassment. Floss smiled, " Thank you Barley, Actually I think you are the most perfect cat in the world..." She purred and briskly stepped up and pushed herself over to him. " Oh Barley!" She purred and licked him.
" Floss I love you.." He smiled and licked the kits, " I love your boys too, I love them as if they were my own." He simply purred and gave her a warm, caring look.
Floss pricked her ears. " Barley, they very well could be your own, if you will willing for them to be your sons, and me to be your mate." She shuffled her paws nervously.
" What do you mean, Floss my dear, haven't you told them about..." He stopped, the tom could not bring himself to say his mate's previous mates name, " Him?"
" No! That's why I want them to you think your their father," She mewed in an encouraging voice, " Your destiny, and mine.. Barley they are intertwined together. I love you, as do Smoke and Coal."
The tom puffed out his chest, " Well, in that case I would love to be their father.."
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Post by Tigerfur on Oct 12, 2007 15:32:04 GMT -5
WONDERFUL chapter! ;D I don't think thats a good idea, the kits might find out who their real father is, and that will lead to a lot of trouble.  Update again soon! ;D
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Post by Shadowstar on Oct 12, 2007 18:24:45 GMT -5
I love Firestar!
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Post by Mossleg on Oct 13, 2007 14:01:18 GMT -5
That was irrelevant, shadowstar. Boy, Barley and Floss didn't waste any time, did they? 
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