Firestars qest rewite }{ LOLZ tell if its good...

[rockpaw]

:)"Peace dear one,''Spottedleaf murmured."Firestar loves you."
"He loves you more,''Sandstorms vocie was choked.
"Ok that's true but im dead now so you have him to yourself,''Spottedleaf mewed.
"It's ture i love her more but she is dead,"Firestar mewed.
"I knew it you love her more but Spotedleaf do you love him,"Sandstorm mewed.
"Yes but im a medicen cat we cant mates,"Spottedleaf replied.
"Well we could have become loners and than mate,''Firestar mewed.
"True why didnt I think of that,"Spottedleaf mewed.
''Wait so Firestar if you had a chocie of me and Spottedleaf you'd chose her?''Sandstorm mewed.
"Yeah id chose her,"Firestar mewed.
"You mouse brained peice of fox dung thats it me and you are over go thorgh your self over a cliff so you you can be with your presish Spottedleaf in Star Clan,"Sandstorm mewed as she left.
acward silence.
"Sorry about that im just gona leave,"Spottedleaf mewed.
"See you in Star Clan in a few mineuts,"Firestar mewed.
"What no go make up with Sandstorm,"Spottedleaf mewed.
"Fine,"Firestar mewed.
"Thank Star Clan he didn't find out about me cheating on him in Star Clan with Tiggerstar."Spottedleaf mewed.



The End
tell me what you think

[A guest]

This probably should have been posted in the parody area.
And this is very...messy. No introductory stuff (author, spoilers, warnings, etc) and a lot of grammer issues.
It has potential, maybe clean it up a bit?

[Pebblespots]

Yeah bro, I agree with "A Guest" no spoiler warnings or anything....you didn't check out my website.....u butt!

[rosiepool]

...It's good, but I think it should have been in parody's...

[Wildstar]

lol funny!!!!!!!!!!!!!
but yeah, grammar and parody section
it still made me laugh