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Post by Siletnstar on Nov 7, 2007 21:25:31 GMT -5
CHAPTER 1
Leafpool sat by a small holly bush, wait for the dark gray tom she loved. A rustle in the bushes told Leafpool that he was there. "Crowfeather, I know you're there, come out."
Crowfeather slowly came out. "What?" He asked bitterly. "I nearly got my ears clawed off by Ashfoot sneeking out of camp!"
"Sorry," Leapool said, then lowered her voice, "My kits are coming!"
"Really? With who?" Crowfeather asked, his eyes widening.
"You, you idiot! And it isn't a good thing eather!"
Crowfeather sighed. "I know. It's just that... well... Nightcloud dumped me, and... and went with Onestar instead! I thought I could trust her, Leafpool. But now... now you're my only hope."
Leafpool felt sorry for Crowfeather. "Well, You can have one of the kits if... if... if they don't all die."
"They won't!" Crowfeather shouted, then bent his head. "Now go, and tell me when the kits are born."
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Post by Silentstar on Nov 8, 2007 13:41:30 GMT -5
Chapter 2
Early the next morning, Leafpool felt sick all over. At first, she thought she hadn't gotten enough sleep, but then she realised,
My kits are ready!
She slunk out of her den and over to the nursery where her sister was, nursing her three kits, Lionkit, Hollykit, and Jaykit.
Squirrelflight looked up when she heard her sister coming in. "What is it Leafpool?" She asked.
"My kits are coming!" Leafpool gasped.
Squirrelflight drew in her breath. "Who did you..." She began.
"Crowfeather." Leafpool sighed, then gasped as she felt it.
"My kits!" She gasped, and slowly, a small bundle began entering the world...
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Post by Silentstar on Nov 8, 2007 13:54:44 GMT -5
CHAPTER 3
To Leafpool, it felt like she had been in there for ages, her sister's stare burning two holes in her pelt. But finaly, three bundles of fur, trwo brown, one a dark gray, were behind her, squealing and whining for milk.
"Hush, little ones." Leafpool sighed happily. "Come and have some milk." And pushed them gently over to her belly where they began to suckle.
Suddenly, they heard Firestar entering the Nursery. Leafpool didn't even want her father to know about her forbidden love.
"Squirrelflight," Leafpool hissed, 'Hide the kits!" Squirrelflight nodded and helped Leafpool put the kits in a small crack in the back rocks and cover it with moss.
"May I come in?" Firestar asked.
"Yes, father. You may." Squirrelflight said, nodding her head.
Firestar ducked his head and padded in. When he saw Leafpool in as well, he shot her a glance.
"And what might you be doing in here, Leafpool?" He asked.
"Just checking on the kits," Leafpool said casuly, shurging her shoulders.
Firestar nodded, then said, "Birchpaw was complaining of belly ach, could you help him?"
"Of course!" Leafpool said, then murmered to Squirrelflight, "Feed my kits, I'll be back later."
Squirrelflight nodded, then said to Firestar, "Perhaps Brambleclaw would like to go hunting with you, father, could you spare the time?"
Firestar gave her a sideways glance, then nodded. "Okay, I'll go ask him." And padded out of the Nursery.
Leafpool sighed as she made her way back to her den.
Oh, StarClan, She thought. I love Crowfeather, and my kits, but I have to heal my Clan too! Oh What have I done?
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Post by ~*~*Dovefur*~*~ on Nov 21, 2007 19:32:34 GMT -5
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!! please continue!
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Post by Silentstar on Dec 1, 2007 22:38:39 GMT -5
Ok, thanks Dovefur1! Here's chapter 4! [glow=red,2,300]Chapter 4[/glow] Leafpool padded to her den where she found Birchpaw lying in a bed of moss, groaning. "Hush, I'll take care of you." Birchpaw looked up at her, his eeys glazed. Leafpool relized with a jolt that he had more than a belly ach... He had Phamtom Bites. Phamtom Bites were bug bites that carried very bad germs. Leafpool quickly gave him some yarrow, Juniper berries, and two poyy seeds. "Rest now, Birchpaw." Leafpool whispered and slipped out of the den and headed for the Nursery. "Squirrelflight, I'm back." "Good, Your kits are hungery." "I thought you said you would feed them!" Leafpool hissed, annoyed. "Sorry," Squirrelflight hissed back. "But Lionkit and Jaykit kept pushing them away." Leafpool sighed. "Well, I'll feed them then." Andlay down by her kits. "What re their names?" Squirrelflight asked. Leafpool looked at her kits. "The gray one is Smokekit." She said, pointing to the smokey gray kit with her nose. "The pale brown one is Mushroomkit, and the darker brown one is Treekit." Squirrelflight nodded. "Good names." Suddenly, before Leafpool could reply, Brambleclaw screeched into the nursery, "Take cover!!! Badgers are attacking!" |
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wildshadow
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Amber eyes gleamed out of the darkness...
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Post by wildshadow on Jan 28, 2008 17:53:42 GMT -5
I WANT MORE!!!!!
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♥ Raven ♥
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I'm in love with Crowfeather.... <3
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Post by ♥ Raven ♥ on Apr 5, 2008 14:16:20 GMT -5
*pounds table* MORE!!!
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Time for a return! And a new name <3
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Post by Airilae-Chan on Apr 5, 2008 14:40:42 GMT -5
Very good! A few small grammar and spelling mistakes, but overall: GREAT! Write more as soon as you can!
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Post by Lightningstar on Apr 28, 2008 9:44:59 GMT -5
The chapters are a little short (but that's ok, I prefer my chapters long ^^), and time moves a little too quickly. Great story though!
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Post by Autumnleaf on May 11, 2008 14:33:06 GMT -5
Continue? PLEASE? With a vole on top?
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Post by Onyxfur aka *~ AITCH~* on May 15, 2008 17:48:02 GMT -5
Lightningstar is right, a bit too much grammer mistakes and not that much discreption, but I like the plot. Continue soon!
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