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Post by Rainstorm2 on Jun 18, 2009 17:33:44 GMT -5
Yea and when that happens i will be moved up at my lake house 4 the summer and wont becoming back to my other house till August TT.TT  |
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Post by Wildstar on Jun 19, 2009 1:41:42 GMT -5
I update this weekend!
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Post by Icestorm on Jun 19, 2009 7:09:09 GMT -5
yay! ^^
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Post by Rainstorm2 on Jun 19, 2009 7:54:01 GMT -5
YAYZ!!!!!!!!!!!!^^ ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
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Post by Wildstar on Jun 19, 2009 19:33:27 GMT -5
Chapter 1-
Fangpaw sighed, his dark eyes slowly wandering around the clearing, searching for the tiniest sign of movement. He shuffled his aching hind paws around, stiff from sitting in one position for so long. He had been waiting here for ages, where had his mentor got to? He rose to his paws and stretched luxuriously, his shining black pelt reflecting rainbow colours from the sun. He swished his tail around and flicked his ears in impatience. He was bored of waiting. He decided to go and find his fellow apprentice, Flyingpaw. He casually stalked to the edge of the clearing, took one last glance round, and disappeared into the long, swaying grass that surrounded the clearing.
Flyingpaw paced around the sandy hollow, shaking her paws every so often to rid them of the dust. Where had her mentor got to? She spied a leaf floating down from the maple trees above and crouched swiftly into a hunting crouch, her tail swishing to and fro. She silently paced towards the leaf, her bright blue eyes trained on its every move, her light tabby ears pricked towards it, all of her senses completely focused on her target. Suddenly she yowled in fright as something large and dark cannoned into her, knocking her off her paws and sending her rolling in the sand. She jumped up, hissing and spitting, her eyes narrowed to slits, when she recognized his face.
“FANGPAW! WHY DID YOU DO THAT?” she howled indignantly. “YOU GOT SAND ALL OVER ME! DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA HOW LONG IT TAKES TO BRUSH IT ALL OUT?”
As if to prove her point she whirled onto the short grass next to the sand and began licking her fur crossly. She spat in disgust whenever the fine dust got into her mouth. Fangpaw snickered gleefully. He was always looking for a new way to annoy Flyingpaw, and it looked like today had been a success.
“Sorry” he mewed, “ I didn’t mean to make you all sandy.”
Flyingpaw glared at him through her thick, fluffy pelt.
Fangpaw twitched his whiskers in amusement and settled himself next to her, their pelts brushing. Flyingpaw snorted.
“Fangpaw, you’re not supposed to be here. Aren’t you supposed to be doing North border patrol with your mentor? And I have a training session with Greytail. So you better clear off before you cause any more trouble.”
Fangpaw grinned.
“Well my mentor’s obviously not coming, and you know what old Greytail’s like. He almost forgot his own warrior ceremony! I can’t believe he’s managed to stay being your mentor for so long without forgetting your training!” His whiskers twitched, his dark eyes boring into her.
Flyingpaw smiled shyly.
“Yeah I guess, they’re not coming, they-”
“SSHH!!!” Fangpaw hissed at her.
“Excuse me? Did you just tell me to-”
“There’s someone coming. HIDE!”
Flyingpaw nodded in understanding and dived into the undergrowth, quickly becoming almost invisible as her tabby pelt blended in with the bracken. Fangpaw growled at the direction the newcomer was coming from, his fur bristling along his spine and his claws digging into the ground eagerly. He sniffed the air inquisitively and instantly his fur lay flat, his claws retreating with an indignant click. He swung his head around to Flyingpaw and growled.
“It’s OK, it’s only Dawnpaw.”
Flyingpaw sighed and emerged from the bracken just in time to see Dawnpaw poke his head through the grass, muttering to himself. He jumped as he saw Fangpaw and meowed.
“Hey, do you know where Firestreak is? He was supposed to meet me at the Great Oak, but he never turned up. Wait…your mentors aren’t here either?”
Fangpaw shook his head, bewildered.
“No, they didn’t turn up either…what…no…Flyingpaw, Dawnpaw. We need to get back to camp. NOW!”
With that he turned tail and streaked in the direction of camp, the grass rustling noisily as he sprinted towards their Clan home. Dawnpaw glanced at Flyingpaw and raced after Fangpaw, Flyingpaw following close behind.
Fangpaw gasped for breath, his heart beating a million miles an hour. Soon the other two apprentices skidded to a halt beside him, panting. The entrance to the camp lay before them, a well hidden hole in the ground which came out on the other side of the trees into a huge sheltered clearing, big enough for all the cats of their Clan to live comfortably. Fangpaw stood and shouldered his way into the tunnel, navigating by scent alone in the pitch blackness. He could hear the others following behind him, making their way towards the surface. He blinked as he emerged into the bright sunlight, the strong glare temporarily blinding him. It only took one glance around the camp to tell him that something was wrong. The clearing was deserted, the grass tramped and the dens torn into pieces. Large cracks ran across the rocks in the clearing and everything from medicine herbs to kit’s toys were scattered across the clearing, lying sadly in the grass, forgotten. Dark red stains were dotted about the grass, and the rank smell of fear hung in the air like a heavy storm cloud. His eyes widened as he scented another Clan’s smell, an enemy Clan, but not one of the ones that lived around here. He yowled.
“Hello? Anyone here? What happened?”
The sound of a bird fluttering into the safety of the trees was his only answer. Dimly he heard the others gasp in horror as they saw what had happened. The world swam around him and reality shattered into a million fragments. His home was destroyed, his family, his friends…
His Clan was gone.
As you can see there are a few plot changes from the last one, I am going to include the attack on Dawnpaw, and they have different mentors, blah blah...Basically I'm writing the same story again but some bits are different! ;D
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Post by Rainstorm2 on Jun 20, 2009 10:32:29 GMT -5
AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by Icestorm on Jun 20, 2009 12:59:52 GMT -5
UBERNESS OF A MILLION STICKS!!!!! (lol thats a good thing btw)
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Post by Wildstar on Jun 20, 2009 15:33:31 GMT -5
THANKIES!!!!!!!!!! WOw that wuz one of my longest chapters ever! Actually it was my longest chapter! lol!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by Icestorm on Jun 20, 2009 15:56:13 GMT -5
XDDDDDD
Longness = awesomeness!
XD
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Post by Rainstorm2 on Jun 20, 2009 19:02:23 GMT -5
Verry long . . .too long . . . naw it's great^^
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Post by Icestorm on Jun 20, 2009 19:29:01 GMT -5
WOOT I JUST GOT A LAPTOP!!! XD srry.
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Post by Wildstar on Jun 21, 2009 1:08:48 GMT -5
THanks guys ;D You rock! RAinstorm you need to write stories so I can say how awesome they are!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  I'll try update nxt weekend  |
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Post by Icestorm on Jun 21, 2009 9:37:00 GMT -5
Yea Rainstorm you should write stories!!!!
Yay!
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Post by Rainstorm2 on Jun 21, 2009 20:50:34 GMT -5
I SUCK at writing stories so stop asking!!!!
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Post by Icestorm on Jun 22, 2009 13:22:11 GMT -5
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