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Post by fernstar on Aug 31, 2007 19:48:27 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]A Light rain dripped from the edges of the warriors den, as Ashpelt awoke. They were aproching leaffall, and green leaves dangled from the brambleroof and sunshine tried to sneek through the clouds. Ashpelt stood and licked his fur clean of scraps of moss and heather. He made his way out of the den and towards the nursery. His true love Tawnyfur, a small tortishell she-cat had given birth to kits in early newleaf. They were now 5 moons old and full of energy. He padded towards the nursery and heard the tiny murmurings of sleepy kits awakening. "Fernkit, Dawnkit" called Ashpelt, his two kits came bounding around the corner of the nursery. Tawnyfur followed smileing proudly. Ashpelt greeted his love with a touch of their noses together and their tails inter twining together. "Good morning my darlings" he purred as his to she-kits licked their father respectfully and loveingly. "You will be aprenticed soon, too". The kits bounced with joy.[/glow]
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Post by dreamheart on Aug 31, 2007 20:29:25 GMT -5
Mari, you should post this according to the Rules and use the form.
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Post by fernstar on Sept 1, 2007 19:23:22 GMT -5
Say what Shelly.......
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Post by Splashwave on Sept 7, 2007 15:14:55 GMT -5
*Buys Glasses* I couldn't read a word! And while trying, I went blind!
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Post by dreamheart on Sept 7, 2007 16:52:07 GMT -5
You should use the form. Actually LOOK in the rules...you'll find it!
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Autumnstorm
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Post by Autumnstorm on Sept 13, 2007 15:19:01 GMT -5
Not a bad story, but the font is hard to read.
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Flowerclaw
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Lele! He's so cute! XP
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Post by Flowerclaw on Sept 23, 2007 12:28:15 GMT -5
Yes, it is hard to read. It kinda gave me a headache...
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Post by Rainshadow on Oct 5, 2007 15:30:39 GMT -5
To make the font easier to read, highlight it twice.
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Post by silverfog on Oct 20, 2007 10:35:16 GMT -5
It's not bad, but you should make it longer so it has more of a plot.
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