Poisonous Snake }{ Loners Rule!!

[Wildpaw]

TITLE:Poisonous Snake
AUTHOR:Wildpaw
RATING:PG
PAIRINGS:SparrowxWhiskers........(not gonna tell you!!)
SUMMARY: When a kit is born, a new prophecy arises
WARNING:Some deaths,fighting
BETA:None
COVER:Hmmmmmmmm... Ill think about it......


LONERS:
Sparrow-brown and black she-cat
Whiskers-white tom, a former kittypet
Tangle-brown tom
Snow-white and grey she-cat

ROGUES:

Snakebite-fiesty black she-cat
Night-black and grey tom
Star-ginger she-cat

The Tribe of the Rising Storm

HEALER: Teller of the Clouded Sky-(Skyteller)-ginger and black she-cat

PREY-HUNTERS

Wind which blows strongly-(StrongWind)-bluish-grey speedy tom

Breeze which blows through brambles-(Breeze)- small grey she-cat

Mountain of Countless Moons-(Mountain)-brown swift tom

Creek which flows swiftly-(Creek)- small brown and white she-cat

Cloud which carrys Rain-(Raincloud)- white and grey she-cat


CAVE-GUARDS:

Rock which lies in Water-(Rock)-large brown tom

Tiger which hunts by Night-(Night tiger)-orange and black tom

Owl which sits on a tree-(OwlTree)- brown and blcack she-cat

Night of One Star-(Night)-Black she-cat with one white speck in the middle of her pelt

Sun which dries up Water-(Sun)- orange tom

KIT-MOTHERS

Leopard which climbs Swiftly-(SwiftLeopard)-golden and black spotted she-cat

Mist which hovers over water-(Mist)-small grey she-cat


So far there is only the allegiances. I will write more if some people comment! I want to see how this kicks off.

[.Swiftclaw.]

this looks like it's gonna be good! keep writing!!

[spottedpelt]

sounds like it's going to be great! Keep writing!

[SandsofTime]

PLEASE WRITE OTHERWISE I DIE FROM NOT KNOWING!!!!!!!!!!!

[Wildpaw]

OK,OK I'm writing!!!! ;D Here's Chapter 1!!Thanks for everyone's comments by the way!! Oh yeah two more cats! Rippedear and Soothingheart!!

Chapter One
Eye of The Storm

The wind howled through the mountains and echoed off cave walls. The Loners huddled in a group under a jutting out piece of rock. "The Tribe is lucky!" said a bad-tempered tom with a gruff voice. "They've got a nice big cosy cave to shelter in while we've got a rock!" "Calm down, Rippedear, I'm sure the Tribe are just as cold as we are." said a calico tabby with a gentle and soothing voice. "Hmmph!" said Rippedear, and with that he curled up and pretended to go to sleep. Normally the grumpy elder would have thrown back a sharp retort, but this cat seemed to have a different effect on him. Her gentle voice, her calm nature, no wonder every tom cat in the Clan loved her. Rippedear was surprised that she hadn't become the Loner's Wound-Healer, or the Herb Manager. They were normally kind and gentle, well, all the things that the cat Soothingheart had. Rippedear's thought were interrupted by a loud cry. One of the Mothers were having kits!!!

PLEASE comment!! How do you like it???!!!

[.Swiftclaw.]

I love it! ;D no offence or anything, but I think chapter 1 was too short... well it doesn't really matter, so please keep writing! ;D
Oh yeah and I thought you were a member but it says your a guest...

[Wildpaw]

Thanks!!Sorry, Chap 1 was short cause I wanted to see how people liked it!! Oh yeah and I also forgot the mothers names!!
CHAPTER 2

Rippedear rushed over. Sparrow had so far given birth to one kit. Soothingheart was next to Sparrow, encouraging her. Finally the second kit was born. Sparrow relaxed. "Two kits!" she shouted, licking them vigourously. "Does anyone know a close by place that is more sheltered?" called Soothingheart to the throng of cats. "There is a small cave a few tail-lengths away that has enough room for Sparrow and her kits!!" shouted Tangle. "Can you lead the way?" asked Soothingheart. She bent down next to Sparrow and whispered something into her ear. "Their names..." announced Sparrow. "Will be Speed and.... " she turned to the small ginger and brown tom, "....Snake.
"Very well then," said Soothingheart. "Lead the way, Tangle!!"

Tangle led the queen and her two kits-Speed, a light grey and brown tom, and Snake, a ginger and brown tom- to a small sheltered cave in a rock wall. "Well this is it!" said Tangle, gesturing with his tail. "Thankyou Tangle!" meowed Sparrow warmly as she guided Speed into the cave. Behind her, Soothingheart carried Snake. There is something funny about this kit, she thought, frowning.
"Oh, this is perfect!!!" mewed Sparrow, looking around with delight. "Thanks sooo much Tangle! "It's Ok" said Tangle with his quiet authority.
"Would you like someone to guard you?" enquired Soothingheart.
"May Whiskers guard me? I would like him to see the kits!" asked Sparrow politely. "Sure. Tangle, go back to camp and fetch Whiskers, please."
"Affirmative." meowed Tangle as he raced away.

How do you likke it?? Chap 3 will be longer if someone comments!! ;D (Sorry, Swiftclaw!! I know YOU have!!) ;D

[Wildpaw]

Heres #3! PLEASE COMMENT!!!!!

The night that Speed and Snake were born, Soothingnheart slept restlessly. She kept dreaming of poison and huge fangs enveloping the Loners. She woke up, panting. She looked around. All of the cats were asleep. Wait a minute! she thought. Where's Rippedear? She got up and looked outside. She couldn't see anything except white, white and more white.
We're snowed in!! she thought, panicking. If we're snowed in, then Sparrow, Speed and Snake must be too!
THen she noticed a dark hole in the snow. Rippedear must have dug his way out! She followed the tunnel and she came out into the open. She quickly ran to Sparrow's cave. "Phew!" she said as she saw that the cave was fine. "Sparrow, are you there?" she called. She walked into the cave. Sparrow, Speed and Rippedear were crouched there, looking worried. "What's wrong?" asked Soothingheart cautiously, though she already knew. "It's Snake!" wailed Sparrow. "He's gone missing!"

Is it good? Is it? Is it? Is it? ;D

[Rainshadow]

yes! i like loner stories, i dont know why. lol.

[Wildpaw]

THanks! ;D

Chapter 4
They searched high and low for Snake, but he was nowhere to be found. Finally Soothingheart, Rippedear and Sparrow were back in the cave with Speed. "Where could he be?" wailed Sparrow. "I'll go check in the main den and see if he is there." grunted Rippedear. He walked off. He wriggled through the dug out hole in the main den and looked around. Everything looked normal. Except...... where was Tangle? Great, two cats missing, he thought. Just then Tangle and Snake crept in. Rippedear slunk back into the shadows, waiting to see what they would do. Tangle whispered to Snake "Go back to your mother now and do not forget what I told you." Snake nodded and slunk back to his mother's den. Hmmmmmmmm thought Rippedear. I wonder what they are up to.

PLEASE COMMENT!! I WON'T LIKE YOU IF YOU DON'T!!!!

[Lightningstar]

Cool story! Keep writing!

[.Swiftclaw.]

Great! Post soon! (and you don't need to keep asking people to comment! lol ;D)

[hige]

yeah, it's great! But your chapters are too short. Good story tho!