Open Your Eyes }{ AshxWhite

[dare.xx.awaken me...]

Title: Open Your Eyes
Chapters: One
Author: Me!
Pairing: Ash x White
Rating: PG
Spoilers: The sight really
Disclaimer: Warriors@ Erin Hunter and Harper Collins
Warning: Fluff! XD
Note: Set between Sunset and The Sight

()pen Y()ur Eye$

Ashfur sat in camp, eyes transfixed on Squirrelflight who was lying in the sun with Brambleclaw and her new kits. Birchfall sat nearby, washing his paws. Beside Birchfall lied Whitewing, snatching glances at Ashfur. "Oh Birchfall." She whispered to the tom "How can I ever tell him?" Birchfall turned to Whitewing. "Tell who what?" He mewed "Ashfur. Oh Birchfall, I really like him, but he does nothing but dream of Sqiurrelflightall day and night." She sighed. Birchfall rose to his paws, and padded over to Ashfur.

"Hi Ashfur" He mewed. Ashfur did not respond to the tom, instead just carried on staring. "Ashfur, look over there" Birchfall said, motioning to Whitewing. Ashfur glanced over to the white femme. He looked at Birchfall as if to say "Yes?" Brichfall sighed. "Open your eyes, Ashfur. Can't you see tht someone else longs for your affections?" Ashfur spun around to lok at Whitewing compleatly. "She loves you Ashfur. Open your eyes and see!" Ashfur padded over. "Uh, Hi Whitewing"

Whitewing reeled back in shock. "Hi..Hi Ashfur." And suddenly, without warning, both touched muzzles passionatley. The whole camp paused to see this unexpected public sharing of affection between two cats the clan never though felt that way.
"He finally opened his eyes and saw." Squirrelflight murmed.

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[Moondapple]

Great story, I loved it! Especially the last line Squirrelflight says.Keep writing!

[Lightningstar]

Pretty good. The only thing that bothered me was that it was kind of confusing to read because of the way the character's speech was all cluttered together... good story, though.